Silver streams of tears poured down your helpless face,
And I felt for you.
I felt the pain that your heart drenched itself in,
And the regret that your mind held deep within its grasp.
I told you it would be okay, and it will be.
All you need is time
To breathe, to cry,
To feel lifes deep revenge just to believe you're alive.
I told you
You only live once.
Take it day by day,
And if you notice something isn't right,
Get rid of it,
Because no matter how bad it hurts,
Or how long time takes to heal your wounds,
It will. The sun always rises, one way or another.
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3 comments:
jen . i love this poem . the first line is amazing like the whole idea of silver tears. good job. my fave line is 'To feel lifes deep revenge just to believe you're alive.' - love tehe wording and the idea of it. if you nitice something isn't right, get rid of it. - good line also. i would look at your like breaks in the last stnaza. like the last line. idk. awesome job :)
wow this is my favorite poem I have heard from you so far! pain drenched heart very effective!! Also the fact that a mind can grasp..need I say LOVE IT!
the line ..you only live once..can get a bit cliche but otherwise its soooo amazing !!!
I realy liked the beggingin there were you used all fo the discription it seem very well written and as for the title sugestions... maybe you could have it be "Run Your Life" or maybe something along those lines
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